Time: 4 Hours
I started over. Just spent time sketching everything out . Took my time. The mouth is a bit of a value test in graphite. I am still not pleased with it (I think it still might be a smidge too wide and the lower lip needs work), but it is much better than the other one. The eyes are a work in progress, but I think will look ok once I start in with markers.
Also, the armour outline is definitely better in this one.